A Bit of Comfortable Fun

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    PART I

    I was currently studying at university, so had decided to move out of home to a house closer to where I study. I couldn’t afford to keep up the mortgage payments so I rented out the three spare rooms to some friends of mine at uni. We were all the same age, 19, and all fairly well built. I had been working out a lot in the past three years, trying to build up a nice looking body. I swam a lot in our pool and it had given me a perfect shaped body, an almost v-shaped torso and powerful thighs and calves. I was proud of my body for once in my life. Matt, James, and Ted were all well built as well. Matt was fair haired with brilliant blue eyes, James had brown hair with a set of rich hazel eyes but Ted was darker, with jet black hair and dark brown eyes. We had all got along really well which made living together so much better. I had the master bedroom and my own bathroom, while the other three guys had to share a bathroom. Our place was nicely furnished with a big TV and leather couches in the living room.

    One day I had just come home from a lecture at uni to hear erotic noises coming from the living room. I had been fairly quite coming in so who ever it was probably didn’t hear me. I walked quietly to the living room and pushed open the door. Matt was sitting stark naked on the couch pumping his muscular arm up and down his cock while watching a girl get fucked by two guys on the TV. “I thought someone was actually having sex in here” I said to Matt. His head flipped around and he looked at me with those blue eyes.

    “Nope, just me wankin” He said casually, “You want in?” He asked, shifting the magazine and lube from the seat next to him.

    “Yeh, haven’t busted a nut in ages, been to busy studying” I dropped my bag and walked over. I slipped my shirt over my head exposing my tanned and well-toned chest. Unzipping my jeans and pulling them off, along with my tight boxers, I sat down naked next to Matt. I looked over at Matt sitting naked next to me. He had such a nice body, well defined pecs and abs with perfectly muscular arms and legs. He had a smooth chest; his arms and legs were covered in a thin layer of light blonde hair. Around the base of his cock was a trimmed bush of dark brown pubic hair, shaven at the top and around the end of his shaft. He was running his left hand up and down his clean cut shaft which was a small 5.5 inches but I didn’t care. I looked back up at the TV watching the porn, stroking my own uncut cock. I slowly rolled the foreskin up and down over my sensitive head, it began to harden. “How long have you been going at it?” I asked.

    “I had only just sat down when you came in” He replied, still stroking and looking at the porn. We watched in silence for another minute and suddenly I felt Matt’s eyes looking at me. I pretended not to notice as a looked me up and down, pausing for a second on my cock. It was a good length hitting at 7 inches with plenty of girth. None of the guys had ever been embarrassed about their bodies and we had often caught each other jerking off. If you heard someone getting a drink in the middle of the night and walked into the kitchen to see who it was it would not be uncommon to find that you were both standing naked having a midnight snack. We had never jerked off together but that was because the opportunity had never arisen. I knew if there was an opportunity all the guys would be up for it.

    “Don’t you use lube?” Matt said.

    “Nah, don’t need to with my foreskin intact, I just do it like this” I replied.

    “Is your head heaps sensitive? Because it hardly ever gets touched right?”

    “Yeh it is, it feels so good when a chick is sucking on my cock the rolls back the foreskin and just does the head of it. Honestly, my best loads are blown that way” I told him. I heard voices and a set of keys being put in the dish beside the door. “Must be James or Ted home” I said.

    James and Ted walked into the living room, both wearing gym shorts and t-shirts, they had obviously just gone for a run. They said hi and took note of what we were doing but didn’t say anything that was how comfortable we were as a group. They both walked into the kitchen and grabbed a can of soda. “You guys want anything?” Ted said.

    “Yeh some water would be great” I said. Ted came over carrying a pitched of cold water a two glasses. I let go of my dick and leaned forward, my moist head touching my abs, to pour a glass for Matt and I.

    “I’m gonna grab a shower” Ted told us as a walked away.
     
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    James wandered down to the couch and sat on the couch next to me.

    “The porn any good?” Asked James.

    “It’s alright, the angles aren’t very good though, you can hardly see anything” Matt replied. James took is slightly sweaty t-shirt off and I could see his smooth chest glisten slightly through a fine layer of sweat. He ran his hand down his chest through his neat happy trail to the waist band of his shorts, tucking his thumbs underneath he pulled them off in one quick motion. He was sitting there in his briefs which were tight against his bulge. He rubbed lightly on the outline of his cock, making it grow. He eventually took of the briefs exposing a semi-erect cock.

    “Chuck us the lube would ya?” He said to Matt. Matt obliged. James took a squirt of it in his right hand and massaged it gently into the head of his cut cock making it grow fully hard. When fully hard James looked to be about 6.5 inches. His pubic hair was left natural but was not too bushy. The three of us sat there rubbing our cocks, making idle chit-chat as we attempted to get out rocks off. Ted came back into the room his body still damp from the shower. He strutted over to the couch, wearing nothing at all and we all got a full view of his nice 6 inch softy against its clean shaven background. He lubed up and began to rub his big soft cock until it grew to a big 9 inches.

    We sat comfortably for the next five minutes in silence, except for the porn movie, everyone stroking their respective cocks. On one side of me Matt started to moan and groan until finally he orgasmed, his thick white load poured out from his cock like a fountain. He kept going for thirty seconds rubbing slower and more gently as he squeezed the last of his cum out. James moaned and said, “I’m about to shoot” in an almost whisper quiet voice. He thrust his hips a couple of times, each with a grunt and his load sprayed from his cock in three thick streams. Each stream landed a different place; one landed on his chest, dribbling over his nipple, the other landed on the arm of the couch, the last one landed all warm on my thigh. I could feel myself beginning to orgasm and I rocked my body gently back and fort adding to the motion of my hand. I reached the climax and with one final thrust my load shot from my cock, landing on the coffee table in front of me. Most of it landed in the pitcher of water, some in mine and Matt’s glasses.

    I lay back exhausted, beside me Matt and James did the same. I had almost forgotten about Ted until I heard him moan and gasp. He had only been jerking for a short time and was no where near busting his load. His gasp had come from when he had stuck his finger up his asshole. He had one leg up on the coffee table exposing his asshole. He closed his eyes and began to push it slowly in and out until he had it the whole way in. He held it there moving inside of himself, massaging his prostate. He continued this with James, Matt and myself watching until with a deep growl he exploded. It was the biggest cumshot I had ever seen, and the most powerful. One shot managed to reach James sitting next to me and landed on his chest, dribbling slowly down until it got caught up in his happy trail. Ted pointed his big cock upward and shot the last few loads straight into the hair. I watched as they plummeted back down landing all over Ted and the arm chair. He sat there gasping, easing his finger out of his ass.

    “I’m going to get cleaned up” Said James after a couple of minutes of comfortable silence. He got up and walked naked from the room his cock swinging from his body. Matt turned off the porn and said he was going for a swim. He got up and walked outside. He dived into the pool, his naked body barely causing a ripple. I made myself comfortable on the couch, laying out on my back, my cock lying against my inner thigh. I fell asleep looking at Ted who was reclining in the chair with his limp cock hanging between his muscular thighs, dripping one final bit of come onto the leather.
     
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    PART II coming soon guys. Hope you like what I have written so far.
     
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    PART II

    It was a week since we had all jerked off together. We had been too busy to do anything like that again. I had walked in on James pumping his cock since then. He had been lying on top of the covers on his bed. He had his legs spread wide exposing his naked body. I had gone in to wake him up because, judging by the time, he had slept through his alarm. I just told him the time and left, smiling. We were all moving around one morning getting ready for work or uni when I said, “We should all just take tomorrow off. Call in sick or whatever. The last week has been so busy, we need time to unwind”.

    “Good idea” Ted responded. Everyone seemed enthusiastic so we all agree to take the next day off.

    The next morning everyone slept in, grateful for the break. I awoke early than everyone else and cooked a full breakfast for everyone. At about 11 James, Matt and Ted stumbled out of their rooms in the sleep clothes, or lack of. Ted was wearing a dressing gown over his clearly naked body. James was wearing a pair of boxers, Matt was just in a pair of tight boxer briefs. I was wearing a loose pair of gym shorts with nothing underneath. “How did you guys feel after last week?” I said.

    “God that was so good” Ted said through a mouthful of toast.

    “Yeh you certainly looked like you had a good time” James remarked smiling.

    “Have you guys ever tried anal masturbation?” Ted asked. James and Matt said no while I said that I had a couple of times but could never get it right. “I can…you know…show you guys” Ted said slightly awkward.

    “That would be awesome” Matt said, clearly eager to improve his orgasm. We finished our breakfast with Ted trying to explain the best way to anal masturbate. We decided there was no other way but for him to actually show us. We walked casually to the living room again, James, Matt and myself sat on the couch like we had done the other week. Ted, however, sat on the coffee table in front of us.

    He shrugged of his robe, the rest of us were still in our sleep wear. Ted put on leg up exposing his whole and said, “This position is easiest as it opens up the hole more. You take some lube and put it on your finger” Matt passed him the bottle of lube and Ted massaged some onto his finger as well as his cock. He got his cock erect, making it point up and giving us a clear view of his ass. He took his wet finger and circled his whole gently. The slowly he pushed it in his face show an expression of pure ecstasy. “Then you just sort of slide it in as far as you can go,” He said demonstrating, “I find it easiest o curl my finger a bit and find the prostate. Once you find it rub it. Some people can orgasm by just doing this but I like to stroke as well”. He continued to massage his prostate while precum oozed out of the tip of his big cock.

    Simultaneously we all stripped off and passed the lube between us. We put our legs up and gently inserted our fingers into our asses. There was a chorus of moans and grunts as we entered our asses. We did as Ted said for a little bit until I said, “I don’t think I can find my prostate”

    Ted said, “It’s really hard to describe…umm...look I’ll show you where yours is.” He took his finger out of his ass and knelt down in front of me. I took my own finger out of my ass. Ted put some more lube on his own and gently nudged my asshole, “Are you ready?” he said.

     
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    “Yeh” I said in anticipation. He pushed his finger in. His finger was sightly thicker and I moaned in pleasure as a put it deeper inside of me. I curled his finger inside of me and moved around a bit until he hit it. I gasped as he pushed against my prostate and began to rub it a bit. “You got it? You know where it is know?” He said.

    “Yeh” I said gasping, “Thanks”

    “Can you give me a hand too” Said Matt

    “Yeh me as well” James added

    Ted moved along and lubed up a finger on each hand. With his left hand he penetrated Matt and with his right he entered James. After a couple of seconds the both gasped and moaned as he found their prostate and began to work it. James’ semi-erect dick stiffened immediately, and groaned in pleasure. Ted removed his fingers and sat back on the armchair. He then entered himself. We sat there for a couple of minutes jerking off with our fingers up our asses. I couldn’t take it anymore and suggested we all go for a swim outside.

    We all walked to the pool in the nude. Each of us got in the pool the water feeling refreshing on my hot body. We swam around for a bit relaxing in the morning sun, we were all still really horny. I moved over to one of the steps leading into the pool and sat down. I began to stroke my soft cock while watching the other three guys muck around. James, noticing what I was doing, came over and joined me. Soon we were both hard stroking our cocks while the water sloshed around us. James stopped jerking off and moved his hand onto mine and pulled it from my cock. He placed my hand on his own cock and I gripped it tight. He then put his hand on mine a and we jerked each other off while we watched Ted and Matt messing around, there limp dicks flopping around.

    Ted suddenly leaned back against the wall at the deep end of the pool and rest his elbows against the edge. His cock was facing outward and Matt ducked under the water in front of him. Suddenly Ted moaned and we looked into the water and saw that Matt had his mouth around Ted’s big cock. Every thirty seconds or so he would come up or air and then go back down.

    I looked at James next to me and signalled we should get out of the pool. We got out and pulled a lounger over to the edge so we could watch Ted and Matt going at it. We sat on the lounger stroking each others cocks until we both came. My cum leaked out of my head and ran down James’ fingers. James’ cock gave one good spurt of cum and the rest dribble into my hand. In the pool Ted gave one last good moan and groaned excessively. He had just cummed into Matt’s mouth. Matt came up for air his face smiling.

    They both came out of the pool happy. Ted sat on the lounger next to us, our now limp dicks hanging between our legs. Matt stood in front of us his dick still soft and yet to cum. I grabbed him by the ass and pulled him toward me. I guided his cock into my mouth and began to suck vigorously on his soft dick. I licked it with my tongue touching the spongy tissue. Eventually he grew hard and moved along to James who was sitting next to me. He sucked him harder until it passed over to Ted. Ted returned the favour Matt had given him and swallowed his cum as he grunted through an orgasm.

    I looked up as I lay down on the lounger. Suddenly a movement caught my eye in one of the neighbours houses. I didn't think anyone would be home at this time of day so I hadn't been worried about people seeing us. Plus I wasn't embarrassed about my body or what we were doing. I saw the movement again and concentrated on the window. I could just see a guy who looked to be about 17, maybe 18 standing in the window looking directly at me. He noticed I had seen him and quickly hid behind the curtain. I lay there for 10 minutes looking at the window but there was no movement.
     
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    PART IV

    We eventually moved back inside the house but didn’t bother to put some clothes on. We were all comfortable being naked. We relaxed like we normally would on a day off, grabbed some lunch and enjoyed the stress free day. At about 4 in the afternoon I hear the doorbell ring. I grabbed my gym shorts from the lounge and slipped them on. Walking to the door I wondered who it could be, we weren’t expecting any visitors. I opened the door and standing before me was the guy I had seen in the window earlier in the morning. He looked slightly embarrassed. “This was delivered to my place instead of yours” He said holding a parcel with my name on it. Has he looked up his perfect blue eyes locked onto mine and I held his gaze. I suddenly felt an attraction to him.

    “Thanks for that” I said trying to make him feel less nervous. “I haven’t seen you around before. Are you new?”

    “No. But I am working a lot so I don’t really get much time to relax. I took the day off because I was just so tired, I work on building sites” I could tell he wasn’t lying by the way he was built. His body was muscular and well tanned, he quite clearly worked outdoors a lot.

    “Me and my friends did the same. We had such a busy week we decided to take the day off and relax.” I said. We talked for a little bit. It turned out he was only just turned 18 and his name was Brian. “Do you want to come over for dinner?” I said.

    “Umm…Yeh sure, if your friends don’t mind. That would be nice” He said. I smiled and said I would see him at about 6. I walked back to the lounge where the three guys were sitting watching a movie. I pulled off my shorts and sat back down.

    “That was our neighbour Brian. I invited him over for dinner. He seems like a nice guy” I said

    “OK. How old is he?” Said James

    “Just turned 18”

    “Oh, what time is he coming over?”

    “About 6. So we are probably going to have to put some clothes on, although he has seen us naked?”

    “How has a seen us naked?” Ted asked confused.

    “He was watching us this morning” I replied.

    At 6 sharp I heard the doorbell ring. I had put on a pair of jeans and a t-shirt, so had the others. I opened the door and Brian stood there. I invited him and we sat down in the lounge with the others. We chatted for a while before I suggested we eat before it gets too late. Sitting at the table we talked about school, work and all sorts of different things. Eventually James said, “So you saw us this morning?”

    “Uh…Yeh. Sorry I didn’t mean to spy but I was opening my curtains and you guys were just…you know” He said looking kind of ashamed.

    “Don’t worry about it” I said, “We don’t care. You ever done stuff like that before?”

    “Nope. I’m a virgin” We looked at each other amazed. How had a guy this good looking and nice not got a girl in bed before.

    “So you have never had a blowjob from a girl?” He shook his head, “Handjob?” He shook his head. “What about a guy?” We queried.

    “No. I haven’t even seen another guys cock before. Never did PE at school and I have my home gym so I don’t use locker rooms” He said embarrassed. We were all quite amazed. We had never jerked off with each other before the other week and had never gotten or given head to a guy before today but we had all seen other guys nude since high school.

    “Do you want too? See another guy naked I mean.” I asked

    “Yeh, it would be nice to know how I compare”. James and Matt had already stood up and started stripping off. Ted followed and then me. Soon the three of us were standing naked around the dinner table. The Brian stood up and took off his shirt. The slowly undid his shorts and pulled them down. He was just standing there in his boxers looking slightly scared but excited.

    “Go on. We aren’t going to make fun of you” I said, “We honestly don’t care about size or anything” I added as a looked at Teds big cock. I pulled down his boxers and out flopped a nice thick 5 inch soft cock with lightly trimmed pubes framing it. “Nice one” I said encouragingly. We sat back down and finished what little was left of the dinner as if nothing had changed. We then moved back to the lounge.
     
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    We sat down on the couches and armchairs. I noticed that Brian was growing hard and said, “You getting a little excited?”

    “Yeh. It’s just all very knew and different” He said smiling.

    “Do you want to get off?” Asked Matt pulling the lube from under the cushion on the couch. He tossed it over to Brian who caught it, looked at it then looked back at me. I gave him an encouraging nod and he squeezed some onto his hand and hardened cock. He began to stroke his thick cock and then stopped.

    “Aren’t you guys going to do it too?” He asked obviously a little bit uncomfortable. We were all sporting semi-erect cocks but I don’t think any of us felt like jerking off.

    “How about you blow us?” James said, “Then we will return the favour”. Brian smiled and got up. James was sitting in the armchair and Brian knelt down in front of him, between his muscular legs. He lent forward and put his lips over the head of James’ cock and began to slowly suck on it. “Further down” Said James encouragingly. Brian obliged and began to suck deeper and deeper on James’ shaft. After sucking on James for about five minutes Brian took his mouth off and looked around.

    “Who is next?” He said eagerly. James got off the seat as Matt stood up and moved onto it. He did the same to Matt taking the entire length of Matts cock in his mouth. Matt groaned with pleasure as Brian’s tongue danced across his head. Ted then got a turn in the chair, Brian doing his best to suck Ted’s big cock. He could take a little over half in his mouth and gave it a good working. Matt and James stood behind the chair watching Brian as he sucked Ted. Eventually it was my turn. I sat down in the warm chair and Brian immediately got started. He sucked harder and harder, using his hand as extra pleasure. Ted, Matt and James stood around stroking their horny erect cocks while watching me moan in pleasure. Finally I pushed Brian’s head off my cock gently. He stood up and I could see loads of precum dripping from his thick, solid cock.

    I got up off the chair and indicated for Brian to sit down. James moved around and stood in front of the chair, jerking his cock. He stood there for a couple of minutes pumping his hand up and down his nice shaft until cum spurted from his dick onto Brian. Some landed on his chest, the rest on his thighs and cock. Once James was finished Brian quickly leaned forward and sucked the last dribble from his cock. Matt took James’ place and pumped his small cock. With a few final good pumps Matt’s cock dribbled cum right out of the head. Matt leaned forward so it wouldn’t fall on the carpet. Instead it landed neatly on Brian’s erect dick. Brian grabbed it and massaged it into his length. Ted then took Matts place in front of Brian and moved his hand up and down the whole 9 inches of his cock. He put both of his hands on his cock covering the entire length, stepped forward a little and began to thrust. Teds pumping of the hips brought him to a quick orgasm his cum spraying out. Drops of come landed on Brian’s cheeks and neck, more landed on his nipples and chest.

    It was now my turn and I was almost ready to blow my load. I got nice and close. I got up onto the armchair and knelt on either side of him. Sitting back on his legs I jerked furiously until it came out in big ropes. I gasped as I orgasmed, my load shooting over Brian’s head and landing on James’s head. The second rope of come landed on the back of the armchair and the rest was sprayed onto Brian’s strong and muscular chest. I lent forward and kissed off the cum that had landed on his face.

    I climbed off the armchair and knelt in front of it. I looked up at Matt, James and Ted and said, “ This is all mine guys. Find some other way to amuse yourselves” Brian looked pleased at the idea of me sucking him off. I leant forward and wrapped my lips and around his head. My tongue darted out and licked the tip of his cock, toying with hole. He gradually moved my mouth further and further down his shaft, using my tongue to pleasure him. Finally I began to move up and down suck, spitting and rubbing his cock all at once. In a short period of time he yelled loudly and I felt his cock throb. I yelled again and I felt a warm jet of cum in my mouth and throat. I sucked more gently easing all the cum out of his young thick cock. It began to grow limp in my mouth and I let it slide out. Brian was looking down at me like I was God, like there was nothing he could do to thank me enough.
     
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    I grabbed Brian by the hand and led him down the hall wondering where Matt, James and Ted were. I led Brian into my room. We heard grunting from my ensuite bathroom and went to check it out. I pushed open the door and in the spa/bathtub was the three guys. Ted was crouched down on all four in the bubbling water with Matt behind him. Matt was thrusting his cock in and out of Ted’s ass. James was sitting on the edge of the tub with Teds mouth over his dick. All three of them were moaning and groaning loudly in pleasure. We stood for a moment admiring their writhing muscular bodies then moved back the bedroom where we lay down.

    I could feel Brian’s cock nudging my asshole and I turned over looking at him. “Do you think you can take it?” He asked.

    “I can try” I replied eager to have something bigger than a finger up my ass. He lubed up his cock and I got on all fours. He gently pushed his cock head in. I groaned in both pain and pleasure as he pushed himself further and further into me. Eventually He had managed to force his wide cock the whole way inside of me and began to thrust. We grunted and moaned in unison at the pleasure and effort. We fucked hard our bodies pressed against each other becoming sweatier by the minutes. From the bathroom we could hear the growls and moans of orgasm from the three other guys. After a few minutes the three of them came out and sat on the bed with us. There cocks red with the effort of the exertion today.

    James leaned in and kissed me firmly on the lips, Ted did the same to Brian. Brian thrusted more and more, harder and harder. I could feel the head of his cock rubbing against my prostate. Brian grunted and pushed harder has a came inside of me. I could feel his hot liquid inside of me. He collapsed on my back and I could feel his laboured breathing on my skin. He slowly drew his cock out of my ass. The five of us lay down on the bed exhausted by the days work but ready for tomorrow.
     
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    i really like it. you should write another series.
     
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    Thanks for the reply. Always good to hear some feedback.

    I would love to write another series. Got any suggestions? Anything you would like to see? I will take any tips into consideration but remember I write them for enjoyment as well so if something doesn't appeal to me then I won't write about it :)

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    THE FINAL CHAPTER

    The following day was a Saturday. I woke up before everyone else and looked around me at the muscular naked bodies pressed against each other. Brian, Ted and James all had morning wood pressing against one another. I got up from the bed and went into the kitchen to prepare breakfast for everyone, surely everyone would be hungry after the previous nights efforts. The smell of breakfast must have woken everbody up because I heard movement from around the house, the toilet flushing, people talking etc. Eventually everyone came into the kitchen, naked, and sat at the kitchen table. We sat eating breakfast naked totally comfortable with the fun we had that night.

    Throughout the day we had different sexual adventures. We swapped partners, tried different positions and did it in every room of the house. It was a good day. We never put on any sort of clothes, even when we weren’t having sex.

    It was six at night on the Saturday and we were lying outside on the loungers by the pool. I had had a quick talk with each of the guys during the day and was going to ask Brian to move in with us. There was one spare room which we had previously used as a study but we really wanted him to live here. He agreed. From that day forward we spent nearly every moment naked and would have a lot of sexual activity. Sometimes we would involve other people; someone we had met at the gym, a current girlfriend, or a bloke from work.
     
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    Good story. Maybe I should've hung aroung straight guys more often.
     
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    Good story!
    I liked that you are very detailed, but I would have loved to have a few more gaps. I think if the writer leaves a bit to the imagination, the reader works to fill in those gaps and it draws into the story/fantasy more. If that makes sense? You should write more. :smile:

    Ha!
     
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