Her Big stepbrother moves in...
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1randombeauty
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Yes. It seems as if we've all been left high, hard, and dry...
He might be struggling to think of a way to do that final sexy submission scene between the stepbro and stepsis.
This is totally understandable. Very hard to find the perfect balance.
This story did it well but is very, very long-winded
Hipster Chicks Love Big Dicks - NonConsent/Reluctance - Literotica.com
He's a way better writer than I am, but when I was writing my story it was hard to transition to the sex scene because I got very perfectionistic about having the perfect transition that ticked off all my boxes. Because I find the "dislike falling to submission to big cock" dynamic so sexy it can be a bit of a stumper how to transition into the mindbreak, submission, defeat and sex in the perfect whilst touching on those notes.
What I found helped was consulting other stories, ( for examples there are plenty of them in this thread that are super hot).
I eventually just drafted it and said "what if I wrote just one sentence, or 2, about a potential sex scene. Or even just stream-of-consciousness it - writing a sentence or 2 with no filter. I wasn't under any obligation to post it, just write for myself some stuff just off the top of my head. Writing with no filter got rid of that perfectionism because I didn't have to post it or anything, and provided much needed clarification to my thinking.
Clarifying uncertainty, with a though-stream or not, is always a great way to break the paralysis cycle of perfectionism.
Not sex related (click on the above 2 links they are), but funnily enough this Youtube video on writing helped a lot also is just generally helpful. Writing is superpowered thinking:
This is totally understandable. Very hard to find the perfect balance.
This story did it well but is very, very long-winded
Hipster Chicks Love Big Dicks - NonConsent/Reluctance - Literotica.com
He's a way better writer than I am, but when I was writing my story it was hard to transition to the sex scene because I got very perfectionistic about having the perfect transition that ticked off all my boxes. Because I find the "dislike falling to submission to big cock" dynamic so sexy it can be a bit of a stumper how to transition into the mindbreak, submission, defeat and sex in the perfect whilst touching on those notes.
What I found helped was consulting other stories, ( for examples there are plenty of them in this thread that are super hot).
I eventually just drafted it and said "what if I wrote just one sentence, or 2, about a potential sex scene. Or even just stream-of-consciousness it - writing a sentence or 2 with no filter. I wasn't under any obligation to post it, just write for myself some stuff just off the top of my head. Writing with no filter got rid of that perfectionism because I didn't have to post it or anything, and provided much needed clarification to my thinking.
Clarifying uncertainty, with a though-stream or not, is always a great way to break the paralysis cycle of perfectionism.
Not sex related (click on the above 2 links they are), but funnily enough this Youtube video on writing helped a lot also is just generally helpful. Writing is superpowered thinking:
1randombeauty
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Not a fan anymore. The tale has lost its allure. The anticipation left the building long ago. Like the old ketchup commercial. Fun while it lasted. But now? Who gives a fuck.
What a completely unnecessary comment. If you're done with it just stop checking and don't reply. This is a real person who will see this, not some huge distant writer.
Which is how we know they're lying. If they really didn't care, they would have done exactly that. In reality they just like the story so much that they're upset that they aren't getting it as quickly as they'd like. I hope the author recognizes it for what it is -- a childish, backhanded glowing review.
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If you don’t have anything nice to say. Or constructive feedback then don’t say anything at all. I have told authors sometime about things I didn’t like. But it was constructive feedback. I also told that same author of the same story many things I did like about the story. And then there is crossing a line and just being mean to be mean.
Bump. Whenever heavy is ready to continue, I know I’m very excited to see what happens next.
Love your writing style dude. If you enjoy writing, I hope knowing you have big fans out there helps inspire you to put out more work!
Love your writing style dude. If you enjoy writing, I hope knowing you have big fans out there helps inspire you to put out more work!
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"a- a- ah! You can only look", Melanie said, holding a hand up, freezing Devin where he stood in the shower. His heart was beating out of his chest, finally laying eyes on his sister's massive chest. The hot water, now hitting his back in the same place for such a long time, was almost numbing. His jaw hung slightly open as his gaze on her became heavier.
Melanie sat on the floor, her back against the hamper, facing the ajar shower door. The t-shirt she had walked in with, was now lying on the floor next to her. She was only in black leggings, her knees bent, legs spread, feet flat on the floor. Her jaw hung slightly open as well, as she stared at Devin's right hand, soapy, stroking the biggest cock she had ever seen.
They sat silently, her hand tracing circles over her the thin fabric covering her clit. As the fabric slid side to side with this motion, she felt how soaking wet it was becoming. Her massive white orbs hung onto her flat stomach, beyond her belly button as she remained hunched in front of the hamper. They were impossibly huge...
Devin felt his cock, ready to burst, as his eyes burned holes in his new sister's body. Her tiny pink nipples looked so much smaller on such large breasts. Her arms held them together from spilling onto either side of her, as both of her hands covered her crotch. This caused her tits to just barely touch, and begin to form what would be more than a foot of cleavage if she pressed them tighter. He saw her eyes, locked onto his thick, soapy pole. He looked at her lips, how perfect she was in this position to face fuck her little mouth, the back of her head pressed against the wicker hamper. How good her lips would feel, stretched tight around his thick cock, filling her mouth and throat.
As he stared at them, he watched as a drop of saliva escaped her small mouth agape, and dripped onto her huge right boob.
*sllllllip*, as she closed her jaw and looked down at the the drop of spit make it's way to her small, pink areola. As it slowly approached it.... it proved to be too much for Devin-
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An excerpt of what's to come. We can't let him come all this way and not get with Melanie, can we?
I've been thinking about this story a lot, and my apologies for letting it go for so long. This is why I wouldn't want to paywall my writing with a patreon or something, I wouldn't like the pressure.
If anyone is still around and interested in seeing this story out, I'll be coming back to it here this week. Don't have time today. Each of these sections take me like 2-3 hours sometimes ha. Fuckin porn, am i rite?...
Melanie sat on the floor, her back against the hamper, facing the ajar shower door. The t-shirt she had walked in with, was now lying on the floor next to her. She was only in black leggings, her knees bent, legs spread, feet flat on the floor. Her jaw hung slightly open as well, as she stared at Devin's right hand, soapy, stroking the biggest cock she had ever seen.
They sat silently, her hand tracing circles over her the thin fabric covering her clit. As the fabric slid side to side with this motion, she felt how soaking wet it was becoming. Her massive white orbs hung onto her flat stomach, beyond her belly button as she remained hunched in front of the hamper. They were impossibly huge...
Devin felt his cock, ready to burst, as his eyes burned holes in his new sister's body. Her tiny pink nipples looked so much smaller on such large breasts. Her arms held them together from spilling onto either side of her, as both of her hands covered her crotch. This caused her tits to just barely touch, and begin to form what would be more than a foot of cleavage if she pressed them tighter. He saw her eyes, locked onto his thick, soapy pole. He looked at her lips, how perfect she was in this position to face fuck her little mouth, the back of her head pressed against the wicker hamper. How good her lips would feel, stretched tight around his thick cock, filling her mouth and throat.
As he stared at them, he watched as a drop of saliva escaped her small mouth agape, and dripped onto her huge right boob.
*sllllllip*, as she closed her jaw and looked down at the the drop of spit make it's way to her small, pink areola. As it slowly approached it.... it proved to be too much for Devin-
------
An excerpt of what's to come. We can't let him come all this way and not get with Melanie, can we?
I've been thinking about this story a lot, and my apologies for letting it go for so long. This is why I wouldn't want to paywall my writing with a patreon or something, I wouldn't like the pressure.
If anyone is still around and interested in seeing this story out, I'll be coming back to it here this week. Don't have time today. Each of these sections take me like 2-3 hours sometimes ha. Fuckin porn, am i rite?...
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