Like I was trying to say, the writing and style of the story was great. I'd read other things by you. I just didn't like the plot shift, because it seems to me it's the same plot shift that every (m/f) story start seems to take. Now I'm willing to bet the main character will do nothing but fuck his team mates and other guys until the story is over with the girls just watching. Because that's been the continuing theme of most of the stories written.
I loved the authors wtiting style and his use of words that get your imagination working in overdrive picturing everything he is writing about is amazing though.