I wrote a poem I hope you all like

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  1. Rowan Ravenseed

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    The Deserted Desert

    Baked and dry an empty sea
    A baron landscape void of life
    No wizened tree to take shelter
    No tiny lizard running
    The life giving sun brings no joy
    The desert cries out but no water comes
    Without rain all will perish

    As the sun sets no relief is gained
    The parched earth groans as it starts to freeze
    The bright moons light illuminates nothing
    A desolate colourless landscape
    The harsh wind howls and empty longing
    When will the rain come
     
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    Thank you for posting. I do like it. I hope the rain comes soon!
     
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    I did'nt like it, i loved it! :fing02:
     
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    Nice one Rowan. Well done :smile:
     
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    Great poem!
     
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    Thanks guys
     
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    Do some more. Nice.
     
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    Its beautiful. You should put it on your blog as well.
     
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    Very nice, I love when a poem uses vivid imagery.
    Thank you for sharing. :)
     
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