Joyful Vacation

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  1. nighthawk9

    nighthawk9 New Member

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    Part1 My wife and I had just finished packing, for what we expected to be the best vacation ever! As we laid down for the night I felt a stirring down below, I was getting a boner. I gently woke my wife up and she told me of a fantasy of hers, she had dreamt of being pounded on a pool table by two guys at once. I take her to a hotel with a pool table and pound her as she screamed "Oh my god comeon make me cum make me cum!" As she climaxed I crawled onto the table with her.
     
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    This is my first story written, how did I do with it?
     
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    really? that's the first story you ever wrote? i never would have guessed...
     
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    No need to be an ass I'm not a writer I'm in college for engineering not this
     
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    It's too brief. You have the most basic skeleton of a story and now you need to flesh out each part.
     
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    maybe read more stories before you sit down to write again. it might help your process.
     
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