Not stories, but poems.. I wanted to know what you think...Sorry....

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  1. Zombie

    Zombie New Member

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    Has no one told him I'm not breathing?
    Can he not see the damage left behind?
    The pain he's inflicted on heart gone wrong,
    The way I see us in my mind,
    Bound together for all of time...

    The anger I see inside of me,
    The way I hate myself.
    The way I can't stand to breathe,
    Every breath is killing me,
    Like every arsenic tear...
    The pain seems unbearable,
    The pain seems too real....

    All I can ever say is I'm sorry,
    I'm sorry...
    For the way I feel,
    For the way I am,
    If I could tear it all away,
    If I only had one wish...
    If I could tear it all away,
    If I could just erase that one day,
    I wouldn't look back...

    I wouldn't look back at all the days,
    I wouldn't look back at all the tears,
    I wouldn't look back at my body,
    Lying on the bathroom floor...
    With a bottle in each hand..
    I'm sorry...

    I only wish I could,
    But time remains untouched,
    And I remain tainted...
    I still remain what I've destroyed,
    It's all I'll ever be...
    I'm sorry.
     
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    Zombie New Member

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    I know this is a little goth-y for all of you guys' tastes... But, it's nice to know what you think... The poem's about my first love, Dustin... I'm still inlove with him... He married, and moved away a couple weeks ago.
     
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    You are very young to have all of the anger, hurt and self loathing inside of you,,,,, you have so much to look forward to and many more Dustins in the future if you would only give yourself a break IMHO
     
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    Eh...Sometimes it's hard to give yourself a break, ya know?
     
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