It is so hard to read a paragraph with 1500 words. If you don't know where to start a new paragraph, just start it every 4th or 5th sentence. People have busted others for spelling or grammar errors, but never for starting a paragraph at the wrong place. Also, if you did not take a typing class. You need to put a space after every period.Otherwise it looks dumb. (e.g.) Also put a space after a comma, like this.