Re-Education of Alysen: 3rd Installment

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I enjoyed the writing, and you're very talented. I just found the size worship towards the end of the story to be a bit strange and out of place with the character development from the first two chapters. Extremely creative and well written.

Any chance to see a collaboration with you and one of the other authors here at LPSG?
 
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I've enjoyed JJsuperbird's stories, as well as Chicagosam and Hung's compilation. I think that Bignthikkev writes well. It might be interesting to see if the people who have posted stories, or I should say multiple stories, shoul attempt to write a chain story, or collaborate on a single storyline. That would be interesting. It might be difficult to do, but it's just an idea.
 

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Thanks for the endorsement Millionman.

I enjoy lots of the writers on this site. We should all try to give positive feedback when we can. It isn't until you try to write one of these yourself that you realize it isn't that easy.

Depending on my mood I like different writers. I've enjoyed Alysen6 and Sizemic's stuff. I agree that Bignthinkkev is a good writer, but I must say he is a bit of a tease :) Unlike some of our writers who want to get to the 'money shot' too quickly Bignthinkkev keeps us reading for days and days.

I enjoy writing about heterosexual stuff but some of the gay material is hot. I'm going to try my hand at a gay scene over the holidays and will want feedback.

It might be fun to try and collaborate. Unfortunately, I sometimes don't check the site for a week or two and it takes me a while to compose a story. By the time I post something the original plot might have moved on. It might be difficult to keep us all coordinated.

I saw a couple of beautiful human specimens working at a Starbucks last week and was thinking it might be interesting to write a story based on those sexy young baristas. Maybe we could all agree to build a couple of characters working in a Starbucks -- Each of us could take it in different directions but would always have to link to one of the characters in the coffee shop.

Just a thought.

JJ
 

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Thanks a lot, guys. I love writing them, and I think the erotica forum needs more of a female perspective as a refreshing addition.

I love talking to hung guys, too...if you are one, hit me up on YIM- alysen6.

Peace,

Aly

you're fantastic alysen, LOVE your work! would not mind at all chatting with you too
 

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I like a lot of this. Some suggestions: I would actually like to see more scenes of interaction and comments from the various women attending the "school" giving more depth to the psychodrama of their love for big cock. You gave some indications of your own such feelings early on--feelings about the stud character's big package as it looked when he was in just a tee shirt, boxers, etc. Some discussion between the women, more about anticipation, etc.

I wrote several stories here with a similar theme, but the female character was more the heavy--here the male is moreso. Interesting that a female writer finds the former to be hotter for fiction, and a male writer finds the latter to be. Not that it would always work this way, but in our case it did.

My stories involving big-cock worship are at http://www.lpsg.org/fictitious-stories/14972-frigid-girlfriend-defrosted-big-dick.html and http://www.lpsg.org/fictitious-stories/14997-part-ii-frigid-ex-g.html