The I love you enough poem

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  1. Smooth88

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    I wrote a poem a few minutes ago. I was thinking while reading a book then I started writing my thoughts down. I liked the idea so I turned it into a poem for that someone... enjoy

    I love you enough to want to see you.
    I love you enough to give you a place to stay.
    I love you enough to help you break into a new place.
    I love you enough to teach you where to go and how to get around.
    I love you enough to show you the good and bad with the trust that you wont deceive me.
    I love you enough to keep a secret.
    I love you enough to tell you all of mine.
    I love you enough to hold you tight in my arms.
    I love you enough to sleep with you.
    I love you enough to be there for you 24/7 no questions asked.
    I love you enough to do things for you out of the pure goodness of my heart.
    I love you enough to only expect two things from you in return.
    I love you enough to be real with you.
    I love you enough to admit my faults.
    I love you enough to accept you for who you are.
    I love you enough to not care about what others think.
    I love you enough to never let you down.
    I love you enough to never make you cry.
    I love you enough to respect you.
    I love you enough to treat you the way you deserve to be treated.
    I love you enough to put our friendship first.
    I love you enough... Do I need to prove it anymore?

    I love you unconditionally.....


    What do you guys think?
     
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    I think I'm depressed that wasn't written for me...

    You're as smooth as your name.
     
  3. Smooth88

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    I can't edit for some reason. I made a lot of additions in the past few hours trying to perfect this poem so I'll just repost the new version of the poem. Enjoy!

    I love you enough to want to see you.
    I love you enough to give you a place to stay.
    I love you enough to help you break into a new place.
    I love you enough to teach you where to go and how to get around.
    I love you enough to show you the good and bad side of me with the trust that you won’t deceive me.
    I love you enough to take the time to get to know you inside and out.
    I love you enough to feel safe and secure with you.
    I love you enough to say what I honestly think and feel.
    I love you enough to sit down, shut up and listen to you attentively.
    I love you enough to laugh at your jokes.
    I love you enough to explain mine.
    I love you enough to keep a secret.
    I love you enough to tell you all of mine.
    I love you enough to hold you tight in my arms.
    I love you enough to trust you with my body.
    I love you enough to make your eyes roll back with ecstasy.
    I love you enough to give you the time of your life
    I love you enough to tell you you’re beautiful even when you think you’re not.
    I love you enough to always want you to have a smile on your face.
    I love you enough to be there for you 24/7 no questions asked.
    I love you enough to do things for you out of the pure goodness of my heart.
    I love you enough to only expect two things from you in return.
    I love you enough to be real with you.
    I love you enough to be very tolerant with you.
    I love you enough to always be mindful and try to say the right things.
    I love you enough to admit my faults.
    I love you enough to be polite and courteous and be a gentleman towards you.
    I love you enough to accept you for who you are.
    I love you enough to not care about what others think of me and you.
    I love you enough to comfort you when you need comfort and be a shoulder to lean on.
    I love you enough to never let you down.
    I love you enough to never make you cry.
    I love you enough to respect you as a person.
    I love you enough to appreciate you as a human being.
    I love you enough to treat you the way you deserve to be treated.
    I love you enough to put our friendship first.
    I love you enough to say I love you and mean it deep down.
    I love you enough to mean every word I say.
    I love you enough... Do I need to prove it anymore?

    I love you unconditionally..... I will care for you always….
     
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    Slight edit....

    I love you enough to want to see you.
    I love you enough to give you a place to stay.
    I love you enough to help you break into a new place.
    I love you enough to teach you where to go and how to get around.
    I love you enough to show you the good and bad side of me with the trust that you won't deceive me.
    I love you enough to take the time to get to know you inside and out.
    I love you enough to feel safe and secure with you.
    I love you enough to say what I honestly think and feel.
    I love you enough to sit down, shut up and listen to you attentively.
    I love you enough to laugh at your jokes.
    I love you enough to explain mine.
    I love you enough to keep a secret.
    I love you enough to tell you all of mine.
    I love you enough to trust you with my heart and soul.
    I love you enough to hold you tight in my arms.
    I love you enough to trust you with my body.
    I love you enough to make your eyes roll back with ecstasy.
    I love you enough to give you the time of your life
    I love you enough to tell you you're beautiful even when you think you're not.
    I love you enough to always want you to have a smile on your face.
    I love you enough to be there for you 24/7 no questions asked.
    I love you enough to do things for you out of the pure goodness of my heart.
    I love you enough to only expect two things from you in return.
    I love you enough to be real with you.
    I love you enough to be very tolerant with you.
    I love you enough to always be mindful and try to say the right things.
    I love you enough to admit my faults.
    I love you enough to be polite and courteous and be a gentleman towards you.
    I love you enough to accept you for who you are.
    I love you enough to not care about what others think of me and you.
    I love you enough to comfort you when you need comfort and be a shoulder to lean on.
    I love you enough to never let you down.
    I love you enough to never make you cry.
    I love you enough to respect you as a person.
    I love you enough to appreciate you as a human being.
    I love you enough to treat you the way you deserve to be treated.
    I love you enough to put our friendship first.
    I love you enough to say I love you and mean it deep down.
    I love you enough to mean every word that I say.
    I love you enough... Do I need to prove it anymore?

    I love you unconditionally..... I will care for you always….

    Sorry for double post....
     
  5. B_ScaredLittleBoy

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    Reminds me why I stopped writing...lol :redface:.

    I found a dvd with some of my writing on...I felt so ashamed :tongue:

    Anyway, you should do all the editing pre-release.

    If you want feedback: It just sounds like a personal, stream of consciousness narrative. For something to be effective it has to tell a universal truth...or be very cleverly structured.

    Still, I bet you feel better after writing that :smile:
     
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