Well, my friend is an aspiring writer and he wants to hand a poem into his teacher for bonus marks and whatnot, but he wants a second opinion on it first and to be honest, I don't know the first thing about good poetry, so I thought that maybe someone(/some of you) would be able to tell me what to tell him...? The Path Darkness; The sullen sleep of a darkened sea. With crests like hair, And with plenty to share. I live to be with he; The mistress; the sea. Silence; The quiet song of the trees lone lark. The quiet night, With words so right. And empty things; And whence; and hark. Equals; The light in this worlds creeping dark. A dark that seeps into their bones, A dark that causes subtle moans. The light that lives here still; By their wills; make your mark. A sigh; The sound that causes hearts to weep. A single one can break a heart, Just one, a war, can start. The tired song of a tired man; A cry; an art. An end; The beginning of another age. The end of a long over-done rush, The final stroke of a painters brush. Set aside the sheet for another day; Another bend; another page.