unfinished story (tell me how to continue/start)

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  1. jwc

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    She put a hand on his shoulder and spun him around, she then kissed him deeply and put a hand under his shirt. Everywhere her hand touched on his skin burned like it was on fire, and as her hand brushed over one of his nipples Tom gasped, Emma seemed to like this reaction because she continued to play with his nipples and chest. Emma wrapped her leg around his and pushed him to the ground with a soft thud. She then proceeded to push his shirt up over his head, and then she began to lick his chest and stomach. As her tongue flick his stomach his penis twitched in his pants as it grew harder straining against the fabric of his boxers and jeans almost painfully. Emma’s hands then began to move lower on Tom’s body passing over the bulge in his crotch making him gasp again. Emma then began to undo the fly on tom’s jeans. Undoing the button then slowly pulling down the zipper to see his penis push through still covered in his striped boxers. She bent down and began to lick the impressive bulge eliciting a moan from Tom’s lips. As she continued to lick the crotch of his boxers Tom continued to moan and grunt. He nearly yelled as her hand began to stroke him pulling his member free of its restraints. She continued to stroke him, fast at first then slowing to a near stop, Tom would moan in protest and she sped up again. This torture continued for what seemed to Tom as hours. The pressure was building inside his body to painful proportion, Tom’s eyes watered as Emma continued to stroke him. Then Tom felt a tight squeezing around the base of his rock hard cock, as he looked he saw that Emma had wrapped an elastic band around the hilt of his member to stop him from cumming. As his orgasm approached Tom began to plead with her to let go, but Emma refused. She stopped stroking him and replaced her hand with her mouth causing Tom’s hips to buck forward uncontrollably. Her tongue swirled around his shaft from the base to the sensitive head, all the way Tom moaned. With her free hand she began to play with his balls rolling them in her fingers, and then she began to suck on them causing Tom to shriek in pleasure. Then Emma hooked a thumb under the waistband of Tom’s boxers and jeans pushing them down to his ankles. Next she produced a small egg shaped device from her pocket; she then spread Tom’s legs and pushed the device into Tom’s anus, “Emma! Ow! That hurts pleass….” Tom complained until Emma flicked a switch and the device began to vibrate against Tom’s prostate causing his sentence to be cut off by his own yells. As Tom squirmed under the influence of the device Emma tightened the band around the base of his member. Wave after wave of pleasure hit Tom’s brain as his climax built but was unable to be released. Tears were streaming down Tom’s face as the pain of his torture continued; the pressure was too much for him to bear. He tried to remove the band himself, but Emma put a stop to that by hand cuffing his hands behind his back.
    “Naughty boy, I guess I’ll just have to punish you,” she said with a wicked grin. She then produced a few rather small rings. “You’re gunna love these,” she said as she began to apply them. She snapped one of the tight bands around Tom sac, causing tom to wince. Another ring was placed around each testicle and the last was fit snuggly around the head of Tom’s dick. The last one also had a long tube which Emma pushed carefully into Tom’s slit.
    “Emma…pl…please st…stop!” Tom stammered as he continued to be tortured.
    “Hush now,” she said caressing Tom’s face, but her wicked smile returned as she finished fitting her slave with his new toys and plugged them in. Tom could feel the electricity flowing into his cock as the tube in his dick wiggled and shocked the inside and the ring around the head shocked the outside. The ring around his sac sent waves of current into his tender balls while the two wrapped around them tightened, squeezing Tom’s nuts painfully. “AHHHHHH!!” Tom yelled as the pain was intensified by the fact that he still couldn’t cum
     
  2. Narcisse

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    your story definitely misses something: paragraphs
     
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    Judicious use of paragraphs would certainly improve it.
     
  4. B_blessed boy

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    the nararration could also flow better its quite monotonous now
     
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