I want to be a writer and am just starting to write little short stories. I wrote this one in about 20 minutes. I'm sure there's a ton of errors both in syntax and grammar and it probably sucks but I need practice and what better way for it than to just write for the sake of writing? I would like to know what you all think and I look forward to reading any feedback.
"Her"
There she is. It's amazing that a single girl can possess all of the qualities I want in a girl. That cute smile, those bright blue eyes framed with those slightly thick-rimmed glasses, that little beauty mark on her cheekbone and that hair that's not quite red and not quite brown. She's looking over here, calm down, look away, don't let her see you looking at her. She'll think you're a stalker if you keep this up. You see her every day and today is finally the day that you're going to ask her out. Don't blow it, you can do it. You're not a model but compared to many guys, you aren't bad looking either, just be confident. Take a step forward.
Ok, you're nearer, slow your breathing. Can she see you panicking? What if she does? No, she can't, she's not even looking this way. What are you going to say to her? Wanna go out sometime? Hey we should hang out sometime? Want to go out on a date with me? Are you tired? Cause you've been running through my mind all day. No, none of those work. Be original, there's sure to be a ton of guys who ask her out on a weekly if not daily basis. Take another step nearer.
It's getting to be that time, think of something witty. Make yourself stand out. What do you say? Don't make small talk, everyone does that. Weather, sports, politics, all topics that people do just to keep up appearances in society. Think of something different to talk about. Damn, I can't see if she's wearing anything to let me know what's she's interested in. Give me a tshirt with a band's name, a bracelet, come on, something to give me a clue. One more step closer.
Time is running out, think, you loser. Don't blow this one. You've never been around her for more than a couple minutes at a time to have at least heard a conversation she might have had with someone about anything. Did she mention she had a cat? No, don't mention that, might be wrong. A dog? It's a 50/50 chance. I hate those odds, wouldn't bet a dollar, let alone this. Another step.
Just do it already! Am I sweating? I am. Not good. Wipe it off quick. It's hot outside, she won't notice one more sweaty person. Mini-crisis averted but major crisis still undetermined.
Last step. Do or die time. The buzzer is about to ring, score that last point. Remember more cliches. Now is not the time for that. Ok, you can do this. How hard can it be? Thousands of people ask each out every day. Nothing makes this any different. Except for the fact that it's you. No, you're ok. Confidence is attractive. Women like a confident man, just show her that and she's yours. Ok, showtime. Take that last step.
She's looking at me, "Hi, welcome to Starbucks. What can I get for you today?" That smile, so pretty. Quick, say something. "Umm, just a medium regular with cream". That's it? You blew it! Just grab your coffee and leave. Oh well, there's always tomorrow.
"Her"
There she is. It's amazing that a single girl can possess all of the qualities I want in a girl. That cute smile, those bright blue eyes framed with those slightly thick-rimmed glasses, that little beauty mark on her cheekbone and that hair that's not quite red and not quite brown. She's looking over here, calm down, look away, don't let her see you looking at her. She'll think you're a stalker if you keep this up. You see her every day and today is finally the day that you're going to ask her out. Don't blow it, you can do it. You're not a model but compared to many guys, you aren't bad looking either, just be confident. Take a step forward.
Ok, you're nearer, slow your breathing. Can she see you panicking? What if she does? No, she can't, she's not even looking this way. What are you going to say to her? Wanna go out sometime? Hey we should hang out sometime? Want to go out on a date with me? Are you tired? Cause you've been running through my mind all day. No, none of those work. Be original, there's sure to be a ton of guys who ask her out on a weekly if not daily basis. Take another step nearer.
It's getting to be that time, think of something witty. Make yourself stand out. What do you say? Don't make small talk, everyone does that. Weather, sports, politics, all topics that people do just to keep up appearances in society. Think of something different to talk about. Damn, I can't see if she's wearing anything to let me know what's she's interested in. Give me a tshirt with a band's name, a bracelet, come on, something to give me a clue. One more step closer.
Time is running out, think, you loser. Don't blow this one. You've never been around her for more than a couple minutes at a time to have at least heard a conversation she might have had with someone about anything. Did she mention she had a cat? No, don't mention that, might be wrong. A dog? It's a 50/50 chance. I hate those odds, wouldn't bet a dollar, let alone this. Another step.
Just do it already! Am I sweating? I am. Not good. Wipe it off quick. It's hot outside, she won't notice one more sweaty person. Mini-crisis averted but major crisis still undetermined.
Last step. Do or die time. The buzzer is about to ring, score that last point. Remember more cliches. Now is not the time for that. Ok, you can do this. How hard can it be? Thousands of people ask each out every day. Nothing makes this any different. Except for the fact that it's you. No, you're ok. Confidence is attractive. Women like a confident man, just show her that and she's yours. Ok, showtime. Take that last step.
She's looking at me, "Hi, welcome to Starbucks. What can I get for you today?" That smile, so pretty. Quick, say something. "Umm, just a medium regular with cream". That's it? You blew it! Just grab your coffee and leave. Oh well, there's always tomorrow.
